100 word challenge

                      100 word challenge

i was walking though the park at night time with my dog Emily and all of a sudden it started to pour down with rain we ran home but i realized that something like a dark shadow had been following us the whole time i was terrified to go out alone ever again!!! my mum and dad were not home so i ran to my friend molly’s house down the road i diddent want to stay in a big old house by my self!

as i arrived on my friends door step…… TO BE CONTINUED!!!

2 Comments on 100 word challenge

  1. antsclass
    April 23, 2017 at 11:43 am (10 months ago)

    oooohh Ava-this is SCARY!. You’ve deliberately chosen details to include that create a scary mood- rain, shadows, a big old house, being alone. When you finally get to the steps of Molly’s house I’m on the edge of my seat. I wonder what will happen next? Do YOU know?
    One thing that is important for you to pay closer attention to is your full stops. Particularly in a piece like this, they make it easier to understand what’s happening, and help you craft the length of your sentences to increase the suspense.
    Well done,
    Ant

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  2. Nikita
    July 26, 2017 at 11:53 am (7 months ago)

    You creaped me out gosh yore a good writer
    Nikita!!!!
    👻👻👻

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